My vision of a utopia is one that does not include the use of modern technology. A life without technology is different from a life with technology. I have spent weeks without a computer, and I find it to be less stressful than when I have it. Technology, while convenient, can create problems, such as decreased human interaction. It would be ideal to live in a world that was not caught up in smartphones and computers.
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