Step 3: Copy and paste the same paragraph from step one HERE and use what you learned to revise the body paragraph you choose:

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Step 4: Write a reflective paragraph that describes the changes you made to improve your writing. Write in complete sentences and be specific! Explain what sentences you combined, any convention mistakes you corrected, etc. Write your reflective paragraph HERE:

my paragraph:
To begin with, these teens are very similar with helping the world out, but they do have many differences with the way they work and how they provide people with their services. While the two teen siblings send phone to soldiers overseas, The Dragon Slayers help the people of the world directly, saving their lives. Although how they work is different, they also help people differently. The siblings provide the phones for soldiers to help them contact their loved ones. The group of teens help people medically and have saved their property as well. Even teenagers can be heroes.