Could someone please check if this is a strong introduction paragraph? And please tell me what I can change to make it stronger.

My work:

Have you read a poem or piece of writing, and you can feel the emotions in the words? Writers like William Wordsworth and John Muir use figurative language to appeal to your emotions. Take these as examples "Continuous as the stars that shine" and "It seemed the most spiritual of all the flower people." This is how John Muir and William Wordsworth express their relationship with nature using figurative language.