Can someone PLEEAASE read over my essay and correct me if anything is wrong??? (This is worth 30 of my points so please answer if you will ACTUALLY help me)

Can someone PLEEAASE read over my essay and correct me if anything is wrong This is worth 30 of my points so please answer if you will ACTUALLY help me class=
Can someone PLEEAASE read over my essay and correct me if anything is wrong This is worth 30 of my points so please answer if you will ACTUALLY help me class=
Can someone PLEEAASE read over my essay and correct me if anything is wrong This is worth 30 of my points so please answer if you will ACTUALLY help me class=
Can someone PLEEAASE read over my essay and correct me if anything is wrong This is worth 30 of my points so please answer if you will ACTUALLY help me class=
Can someone PLEEAASE read over my essay and correct me if anything is wrong This is worth 30 of my points so please answer if you will ACTUALLY help me class=

Respuesta :

Answer:

I think that it looks gud u can always run it over Grammarly to make sure.

Explanation:

Answer:

Explanation:

Page 1:

Try not to use got. So instead of "got selected" use "was selected."

I've read "The Giver" so I know the story, and who Gabriel is, but your reader may not, you don't explain on page 1, and you should.

Page 2:

Lower case "eleven"

Also, "stirrings" aren't the same as being released, or a reason to be released. There is a disconnect there.

Also, it would be nurturer of the baby. You're missing an r.

Page 4:

The baby could not choose between being released or not.

Page 5:

Don't start a sentence with "And"  you've done it twice.

You're missing the end, it's cut off. I don't know your grade, but good work.

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